My TED talk draft – you can edit and improve

Written by Lior Zoref Date 3/1/2012 Time 10:00

Update: Thank you for everyone who helped me to improve my talk. I’ve removed the text from Wikipedia in order to leave some room for surprise :-)

imageA few months ago I met with Jimmy Wales, the founder of Wikipedia. Wikipedia is the most impressive example I know of crowd wisdom. He was very interested and enthusiastic about the idea that I was going to present at TED.

At the end of the conversation he said this: “listen, why don’t you try and publish your TED talk text on Wikipedia? Allow the crowds to edit and improve your presentation!”.

Actually, a wonderful idea.

Over the last few weeks I have built the presentation with your help. It contains examples, sentences and even jokes I got through the wisdom of the crowds, your wisdom.

Now I am proud to present the first and full draft of the text as a Wiki page in Wikipedia.

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You are welcome to edit it as you wish. Fix mistakes, add, erase and/or anything that can make the presentation better.

Until now the crowd wisdom has brought me to create a presentation based on your ideas, now with crowd wisdom we can learn how crowds can contribute to improve the presentation.

In addition, if you have any general comments or new ideas, you can comment here.

Thank you.

One Response to “My TED talk draft – you can edit and improve”

  1. Noam Ilovich says:

    Hi,

    A few comments:
    1. In the introduction you are jumping from high school to current life with no happy end (wife, kids, etc…)
    2. In the movie you are showing with Yossi about your dream – the subtitles are white and it’s hard to see them completely since Yossi is wearing pants with similar color. Maybe add some border to each letter of the subtitles to adjust the visibility.
    3. Give the bull a funny name (Tedi???), which will connect the people to the bull…
    4. The time to guess the weight and the length of the time in your lecture is too fast. I’m not sure on this, but I think you could wait for a while advance a few slides/minutes, allow older people to submit their result and maybe jump back to the guessing results later..

    I updated a few words in the lecture but I feel that you may want to add a few more personal questions through the lecture so that the crowd will be more engaged – such as, how many of you asked your friends for advice while trying to purchase an appliance for your home? and how many of you have responded to such a an advice ? …
    the contribution you mentioned is the key (as you said) to the healthy relationships in real life and on fb.

    Good luck!!
    Noam

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